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I couldn't stop laughing! I remember when you sent the "Crazy" and the "Harsh Court" messages! Ah, good times, eh? [[User:Marc J.|Marc J.]] | I couldn't stop laughing! I remember when you sent the "Crazy" and the "Harsh Court" messages! Ah, good times, eh? [[User:Marc J.|Marc J.]] | ||
My edit simple changed words from cousin to uncle to convey Distorted's relationship to Dizzy. | |||
Also, you might want to revise it a little. In the duel you have Rasputin saying, "Give it up.. your uncle's already left the island.." However, later you have Dizzy asking if he made it out safely. In addition, if I recall correctly, I had it so that it was RPed so that Dizzy knew Distorted was taken by carriage north, towards Fronen. Personally, I would recommend removing the "give it up..," taunt, and maybe just add the anwser to her last moments. | |||
Revision as of 21:48, 7 July 2007
I couldn't stop laughing! I remember when you sent the "Crazy" and the "Harsh Court" messages! Ah, good times, eh? Marc J.
My edit simple changed words from cousin to uncle to convey Distorted's relationship to Dizzy.
Also, you might want to revise it a little. In the duel you have Rasputin saying, "Give it up.. your uncle's already left the island.." However, later you have Dizzy asking if he made it out safely. In addition, if I recall correctly, I had it so that it was RPed so that Dizzy knew Distorted was taken by carriage north, towards Fronen. Personally, I would recommend removing the "give it up..," taunt, and maybe just add the anwser to her last moments.